FCP Bob 1,312 Posted February 2, 2014 Share Posted February 2, 2014 Pretty good Zach. Easy writing style, very readable, relatable to most readers. Nice job. I agree with Chris. Good read. Link to post Share on other sites
Zach6668 513 Posted February 2, 2014 Author Share Posted February 2, 2014 A suggestion with your blog. Do not make super strong statements and take really strong positions on things that will make you seem like an extremist if you are hoping that it will help you in your career. I'm not saying to lie or take a position that you don't believe in but try and stay away from absolutes when discussing complicated topics. Yeah, I already thought about that. Good advice, though. Link to post Share on other sites
gruven 530 Posted February 2, 2014 Share Posted February 2, 2014 I gave it a second read. If I were to give you one tip as an editor, I would say there were a couple of spots where you looked like you were trying to write. The best writing styles sound like you're having a conversation with a friend. If the phrasing isn't something you'd use in your normal vernacular, then don't use it in your writing. IMO, writing a blog isn't like writing a paper. In school work you're TRYING to impress with your intelligence and breadth of knowledge. In a blog, you're just trying to communicate your thoughts and feelings. So keep it real, and it reads even better. For the first time out of the gate, you did a fantastic job of that. If you clean up those couple of instances, you have a solid read, and people will keep on coming back. examples: "For now, I will continue to dream of Japanese bullet trains and palatial Russian metro stations, inspired by the stories told inStraphanger." Would you really say it that way in conversation? "For as long as I can remember, I loved trains. I grew up watching Thomas the Tank Engine on Shining Time Station, and playing with my Brio wooden train set (which my children will be playing with some day). My Mom fondly recounts the story of the time I was given a matchbox car or truck of some sort, and I threw it on the ground, yelling “I only like trains!” to the poor soul who was thoughtful enough to bring young me a gift." Great stuff. Immediate connection, very conversational. Link to post Share on other sites
Zach6668 513 Posted February 2, 2014 Author Share Posted February 2, 2014 Good point, thanks. Link to post Share on other sites
Zach6668 513 Posted February 2, 2014 Author Share Posted February 2, 2014 Are there any reasons why minimum wage is not tied directly to something like the inflation rate or the CPI? Link to post Share on other sites
FCP Bob 1,312 Posted February 2, 2014 Share Posted February 2, 2014 Are there any reasons why minimum wage is not tied directly to something like the inflation rate or the CPI? less obsessing about AHL rules that you don't like and more newspaper reading for you. That's exactly what the Ontario government will be doing from now on. They announced it this week. Link to post Share on other sites
mrdannyg 274 Posted February 3, 2014 Share Posted February 3, 2014 Are there any reasons why minimum wage is not tied directly to something like the inflation rate or the CPI? For the same reason that the retirement age isn't tied to actuarial estimations. It was put in place by rich people who only wanted something that would effect people much different than them, and they underestimated how structural it would become to society. I read somewhere that if the retirement age of 65 was pushed forward in line with extended life expentencies, it would now be in your early 80's. Can you f'ing imagine?? Link to post Share on other sites
Zach6668 513 Posted February 4, 2014 Author Share Posted February 4, 2014 New Urbanism sucks. Link to post Share on other sites
Zach6668 513 Posted February 4, 2014 Author Share Posted February 4, 2014 Robyn Doolittle is going to be on the Daily Show on Thursday. Link to post Share on other sites
FCP Bob 1,312 Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 Robyn Doolittle is going to be on the Daily Show on Thursday. Not everybody is going to know the names of the Toronto Pravda reporters as well as you do. She isn't Dr Doolittle's Great Niece but is a Toronto Star reporter and just released a book about Mayor Tommy Boy Link to post Share on other sites
Zach6668 513 Posted February 4, 2014 Author Share Posted February 4, 2014 She wrote a book? I thought she was just another pretty face. Link to post Share on other sites
serge 904 Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 Robyn Doolittle is going to be on the Daily Show on Thursday. comment on a news story that I found to be appropriate: Just another wannabe reporter trying to make a name for herself by trashing the only prominent figure that would give her the time of day. Revealing past family moments in a national inquirer mode is classless. Truly classless Link to post Share on other sites
serge 904 Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 she is pretty cute, she should start doing sports and consider sideline reporting.. Not quite Erin Andrews territory, but much hotter than Pam Oliver. Link to post Share on other sites
FCP Bob 1,312 Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 She wrote a book? I thought she was just another pretty face. Link to post Share on other sites
Zach6668 513 Posted February 4, 2014 Author Share Posted February 4, 2014 she is pretty cute, she should start doing sports and consider sideline reporting.. Not quite Erin Andrews territory, but much hotter than Pam Oliver. Nice. Perpetuating the objectification of women. Link to post Share on other sites
Zach6668 513 Posted February 4, 2014 Author Share Posted February 4, 2014 Is that the real cover? Jeez. Link to post Share on other sites
gruven 530 Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 So a very well accredited investigative reporter, one of two that wrote the original Rob Ford Crack Video story, writes a book on a topic that everyone is screaming for more on.... and that makes her... wrong? Link to post Share on other sites
Zach6668 513 Posted February 4, 2014 Author Share Posted February 4, 2014 So a very well accredited investigative reporter, one of two that wrote the original Rob Ford Crack Video story, writes a book on a topic that everyone is screaming for more on.... and that makes her... wrong? Yes, she should stick to sideline reporting. /serge Link to post Share on other sites
serge 904 Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 Nice. Perpetuating the objectification of women. look at you all self righteous..I am sure you have never made any sort of joke like that in your life.. Link to post Share on other sites
gruven 530 Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 Yes, she should stick to sideline reporting. /serge Topless, no doubt. Robyn Doolittle: "I've uncovered video evidence along with a signed confession that Rob Ford sells heroin to kindergarten children" Serge: (in best Joe Namath slurring) "I want to kiss you" Link to post Share on other sites
serge 904 Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 So a very well accredited investigative reporter, one of two that wrote the original Rob Ford Crack Video story, writes a book on a topic that everyone is screaming for more on.... and that makes her... wrong? sure if you like attacks, national enquirer like stories, sensationalizing the life of a man that has had problems...sure... Link to post Share on other sites
serge 904 Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 So a very well accredited investigative reporter, one of two that wrote the original Rob Ford Crack Video story, writes a book on a topic that everyone is screaming for more on.... and that makes her... wrong? What makes her very well accredited? The fact that the star hired to cover city hall ? Link to post Share on other sites
Zach6668 513 Posted February 4, 2014 Author Share Posted February 4, 2014 reporting facts is not sensationalizing, serge. the public has a RIGHT to know what kind of shit their elected officials are up to, even in their private lives. it's part of the job. we've gone over this before. Link to post Share on other sites
Dubey 1,035 Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 Googled her, Was not disappointed. How long before this is a Hollywood movie? 1 year? Link to post Share on other sites
FCP Bob 1,312 Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 Topless, no doubt. Robyn Doolittle: "I've uncovered video evidence along with a signed confession that Rob Ford sells heroin to kindergarten children" Serge: (in best Joe Namath slurring) "I want to kiss you" Link to post Share on other sites
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